Thursday, November 26, 2009

What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

You husband steal'n son of a gun



You think you stole him so you won



But just give it a little bit of time



You'll get older and wrinkles will come



Your think black hair will then grey some



And youll know a little of my pain



The smell of perfume will enter the door



And youll find make up on all his clothes



And a little fuss will bring the papers on



Youll lose your husband like I lost mine



And then youll be left there cryin



And nothin will be done



I know youll feel the pain youve caused



So you can take him I dont care



It will be your heart ache in a couple of years



And in the end you will know I've won



I wish you the best of luck



But luck wont help his erges of lust



And that is how this story always ends



I stole him and made him mine



Then you took him in just a matter of time



Justice will always prevail



His ex-wife is laughin now



And pretty soon I'll be at her side



Then you can join us in a couple years



We'll sit back in rockin chairs



Laughin at wife number four



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

It's juvenile and it just plain sucks really bad.



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

It needs a hook........a chorus and some of your lines dont rhyme. Work on it. Get your point across with a good hook and not so many words



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

It preety good work on it a little more I think you can do better



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

rele good...needs a catchy tune or chorus



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

this is a good song but it is not happening with every people



What do you think of this song I wrote? Its suppose to be in the country genre?

It's okay. But you probably should separate the chorus from the verses and the lyrics need to have more words that rhyme. But it is pretty alright actually.

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