Thursday, November 26, 2009

What do you think of my story so far?

Another day at school. Another day going completely unnoticed. I raised my hand in Mr. Lando's English class, and of course he chose CIndy McAdams. Cindy had it all; blonde hair, blue eyes, and a tiny waist. All the guys loved her. Probably because she hooked up with at least twenty of them every weekend. Me? I was your average-looking girl. Brown hair, brown eyes. Nothing special. I weighed 115 pounds, but at 5'2 I thought that was a little chunky. I talked about it with my mom before, but she never gave good advice, if any at all.



"It's what's on the inside that counts, Honey." she's say.



Bullshit. Nobody cared about your insides, this was high school.



"Jennifer?"



I turned around to see Matthew Jacobs, one of the hottest seniors. Shaggy, jet-black hair that would always fall perfectly into his gorgeous crystal blue eyes.



"Yeah?" I said, trying to act cool, but not too cool, like not too cool for him but not un-cool enough, but then my voice cracked at this mix of coolness and



What do you think of my story so far?

hey it looks pretty good! Are you going to post it anywhere?



Try not to make it too cliche tho...



like hot school jock falls in love with a normal girl but popular girl who likes hot jock tries to sabotage normal girl lol



Keep it up tho...curious to see how it turns out!



What do you think of my story so far?

i like it...to be honest.



What do you think of my story so far?

WOW!! Hehe I wanna read the next part :)



What do you think of my story so far?

Good.



What do you think of my story so far?

i like it, one suggestion on my part is to change Cindy McAdams' last name to just Adams



it flows a little better



What do you think of my story so far?

i luv it!! keep it up

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