My Minnie Mine
Her hair is like chains of gold
She smiles like sunshine and her attitude is bold
Her strength is her tenderness and her heart is pure and fair
She is truthful and we have true love, that閳ユ獨 rare
Her light she devotes to friends and mostly to God
She has great love for me and I love her so much more every day
Her love is true for me and we embrace our individuality in every way
She lets me lead the relationship and I never have to prod
The things that she does are both all right and sublime. My love, I do love you I have to say
She is my fair maiden, good games with me she loves to play
Maters of the heart she never lets me down
She makes things better for me when ever I frown.
My true love fair with hair of black
Beautiful skin and nothing good she lacks
Her eyes are of chocolate and dark so nice
Her teeth are straight and her discipline is never slack.
I love you so I love you now I love you every way and the love that you may stack.
So remember love as love can be.
My friend, someone so special, but it first starts with me.
My love is Minnie and I love her so
We have been threw heck and back to rescue her I go
Her past loves were of trouble and strife
Because of them she hated love and she regretted life
Her heart was torn and trust was shorn she wanted none of that
When I came to her with lust for life and desires of love
With faith in maters of the Heart and God up above
Friends we first became as I showed her what love can be
She saw my heart and finally saw the inner me
I showed her love and what love could be
We cried at the idea of being parted and the future together started
To be more of a good less of a bad. Soon after she lost both her mom and her dad
She decided to love me and embrace my love that was pure
Her heart was pierced and there was no sadness cure
Except to live out a promise for me, to her, take care
That was the last promise I made to her mom there
It took long nights with prayer and strife
But after 5 years of this she became my wife
Happy ever after is now our life. We still have problems we still have strife but
It is all very bearable as Minnie as my wife.
Her hair is like chains of gold
She smiles like sunshine and her attitude is bold
Her strength is her tenderness and her heart is pure and fair
She is truthful and we have true love, that閳ユ獨 rare
Her light she devotes to friends and mostly to God
She has great love for me and I love her so much more every day
Her love is true for me and we embrace our individuality in every way
She lets me lead the relationship and I never have to prod
The things that she does are both all right and sublime. My love, I do love you I have to say
She is my fair maiden, good games with me she loves to play
Maters of the heart she never lets me down
She makes things better for me when ever I frown.
My true love fair with hair of black
Beautiful skin and nothing good she lacks
Her eyes are of chocolate and dark so nice
Her teeth are straight and her discipline is never slack.
I love you so I love you now I love you every way and the love that you may stack.
So remember love as love can be.
A friend, some special but it first starts with me.
What do you think about this poem of mine?
very nice i liked it.
What do you think about this poem of mine?
Why did you repeat an entire section of the poem?
Check your spelling.
Try harder. Vary your diction. Develop your rhyme scheme and meter. Your inflection shows no pattern.
I can appreciate the subject, and your intent is clear, sweet and honorable, but the poem parallels a middle school effort or a drawn-out Hallmark card.
Since you mention marriage, I surmise that you're at least in your early 20's. There are more elegant ways to express your feelings. Sorry.
What do you think about this poem of mine?
Is it a poem or a descriptive story?????????????????
What do you think about this poem of mine?
Cliche and inconsistent in rhyme and form.
Better luck next time.
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